英文作文功课:我的梦想旅行.老师们可不可以替我改改.花了一大段时间终於写好了,我的英文很差,身边又没人懂英文.因为老师说要找其他人看看,唯有贴上百科给大家看看Title:MyDreamVacation老|小学作文问答-字典翻译问答网

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英文作文功课:我的梦想旅行.老师们可不可以替我改改.花了一大段时间终於写好了,我的英文很差,身边又没人懂英文.因为老师说要找其他人看看,唯有贴上百科给大家看看Title:MyDreamVacation老

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英文作文功课:我的梦想旅行.老师们可不可以替我改改.

花了一大段时间终於写好了,我的英文很差,身边又没人懂英文.因为老师说要找其他人看看,唯有贴上百科给大家看看

Title:MyDreamVacation

老师说不用写太多地方,把去过的地方写出来就可以,最重要全过去式.

MyDreamVacation

June32011

Myfirstdreamvacationwasin2010,whenIspentmy21stbirthdayinTaipei.

Taipeiwasabeautifulcity,ithasashoppingcenter,ahot-spring,amuseum,nightmarket,zoo,themepark…..

ItaketheairplanetoTaipei.TaipeiweatherwassohotonJune.

MyFavoritesactivitieswaswenttohot-springinbeitou,Itemitsthesulfurmistallyearround.Theplacewasbestowedwithabundanthotspringresources.Itwascalled"thehotspringvillage".

TaipeihasmanymuseumandMemory.ItakeMRTtomuseumandzoo,

IwenttoSunYat-senMemorialHall,NationalPalaceMuseumandNationalMuseumofHistory.IsurprisedchinahistorywhenIsawtheNationalPalaceMuseum.Ithousestheworld'slargestcollectionofpricelessChinesearttreasures,onewhichspansChina'snearly5000-yearhistory.

WhenIwenttofinishthemuseum,IwenttotheTaipeiZoo.TheTaipeiZoowasthelargestcityzooinAsia.WhenIenteringthegrounds,Isawapopularpandafacility.Itakethevisitors'tramwenttowatchedthePenguinHouseAfrican,Australian,DesertAnimalAreas,becausecannotseethatanimalinHongKong.

MyFavoritesfoodwasTaiwanSnacks,,SteamedSandwich,OysterOmelet,StinkyTofu,PearlMilkTeawasamajoringredientinnightmarkets.SoIwenttovisitoneofthemanynightmarketsinTaiwan

Ibuyapostcardandbookmarkbringbackforyourfamilyandfriends.IbuymanyTaiwansnacksformyself.

我的英文很差,相信有很多地方不足,但已经很用心写了,请大家多多指教/_

陈金醮回答：

　　我帮你改了一下. 　　MyDreamVacation 　　June32011 　　Myfirstdreamvacationwasin2010,whenIspentmy21stbirthdayinTaipei. 　　Taipeiisabeautifulcity,andithasashoppingcenter,ahot-spring,amuseum,nightmarkets,azoo,andthemeparks….. 　　ItooktheairplanetoTaipei.TaipeiwasreallyhotinJune. 　　Myfavoriteactivitieswastogotohot-springinBeitou.Theplacewasbestowedwithhotspringresources,andsottwascalled"TheHotSpringVillage". 　　Taipeihavemanymuseumsanditgavemeabigimpression.ItooktheMRTtomuseumandzoo, 　　andIalsowenttotheSunYat-senMemorialHall,theNationalPalaceMuseumandtheNationalMuseumofHistory.IwassurprisedofChina'shistorywhenIsawtheNationalPalaceMuseum.Ithastheworld'slargestcollectionofpricelessChinesearttreasures,whichincludesonewhichspansChina'snearly5000-yearhistory. 　　Afterthemuseum,IwenttotheTaipeiZoo.TheTaipeiZooisthelargestcityzooinAsia.WhenIenteredthegrounds,Isawapopularpandafacility.Itookthevisitors'tramtoseethePenguinHouse,andalsotheAfrican,Australian,DesertAnimalAreas.MainlybecausewecannotseethoseanimalsinHongKong,soIenjoyedthetripalot. 　　MyfavoritesfoodareTaiwansnacks,SteamedSandwich,OysterOmelet,StinkyTofu,andPearlMilkTea.Thosewerefavoritesinnightmarkets.IwenttovisitoneofthemanynightmarketsinTaiwan,too. 　　Iboughtapostcardandabookmarkformyfamilyandfriends,andIboughtmanyTaiwansnacksformyself,too. 　　搂主我改了一下你的文法问题哦~以后要注意过去式和现代式词的使用方法.