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2009年浙江高考英语作文,求点评5月1日,高二三班的学生志愿者liyue和zhanghua去阳光敬老院(SUNSHINENURSINGHONE)开展志愿者活动(送水果、打扫、聊天等).假如你是学校英语报的记者,请按下列
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2009年浙江高考英语作文,求点评

5月1日,高二三班的学生志愿者liyue和zhanghua去阳光敬老院(SUNSHINENURSINGHONE)开展志愿者活动(送水果、打扫、聊天等).假如你是学校英语报的记者,请按下列要求用英语写一则100~120词的新闻报道.

1.时间地点人物活动;2.老人们的反应3.简要评论

StudentVolunteerBroughtSunshinetotheElderly

Mayfirst,liyueandzhanghuawhocamefromtheclass2ofsecondyearinourschoolandtheyhavebeentotheSUNSHINENURSINGHOMEasthevolunteer.Atmorning,theytooksomefreshfruittotheoldandtheoldweregratified.LiandZhangdidsomehourseworkinthenursinghomeandmadetherecleanandcomfortable.Atthemoment,theoldhadeatenfruitwithsmile.After,theytalkedtotheoldandtheywereallhappy.

Asaschoolreport,Ihavedonesomeinterviewtotheoldandmostsaid:"theyaregoodboysandwepleasuretoseethemagain."SoIcanseethehappinessontheirface.

Ithinktheyareexmpleastheseniorschoolstudents.Theyknowwhattheoldneedandtheyknowhowtocarabouttheold.Ifwecantryourbestforthesociety,ourlifewouldbemoreharmonious.

侯训波回答:
  第一句话有语法问题啊.liyueandzhanghuawhocamefromtheclass2ofsecondyearinourschool只是主语.没谓语啊.应该把后面的andthey删了.第二段Asaschoolreport,应该是Asaschoolreporter,还有,on...
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