求高手修改2011考研作文
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图画是在雪地上有一个赈灾捐款的箱子,箱子边上的雪都融化了
Thisisawarmandthought-provokingpicture.Asisshowninthecartoon,inthewinterstandsadonationboxwhichhavethawedthesnowaroundit.Itisobviousthatthedonationcanbringpeopleofthedevastatedzonenotonlymaterialsupportbutalsoinspiration.
Wecandeducefromthecartoonthatthedrawerwantstoremindustoholdlovemindsforever.Thedisatersareterribleandunfortunate.Theytakeawaypeople"swealth,healthandevenlife.However,therearenumeriouskindpersons,Theytrytheirbesttohelpthepoor,thedisabledanditslike.Asaresult,thepeopleintroublehavepowertopickupthepiecesandhaveconfidenceandcourageliveon.
WhenIreadthereportsofdonation,Ifeelsoinspiring.One"shelpisverytiny,butwhenitisaddedtogether,itshowstheunimaginablepower.Therefor,Istronglyadvocatethateverybodygiveahandtoothers.Onlywithloveandcontribution,Iamsure,wouldoursocietybecomemorebeautifulandmoreharmonious.