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帮我看一下这篇作文语法哪里有错误还有哪些地方可以修改一下的,MyclassmateWangLi,whoseworkwaspublishedontheschoolnet,wonthefirstprizeinourschool"scalligraphycompetition.Somestudentsholdtheopinionsthatle
问题描述：
帮我看一下这篇作文语法哪里有错误还有哪些地方可以修改一下的,
MyclassmateWangLi,whoseworkwaspublishedontheschoolnet,wonthefirstprizeinourschool"scalligraphycompetition.SomestudentsholdtheopinionsthatlearnigcalligraphyisextrordinaryimportantforitcandevelopourChinesetraditionalcultures.Inrecentyears,manytraditionalthingshavebeenlosesightof,especiallybyadolescent.Others,whohavetheoppositeideasthatasthepaperlessofficesbecomemoreandmorepopular,wespentlittletimeinwriting.So,it'snotneccessarytopratisecalligraphy.
原文：
1.事件：你班同学王立在校书法比赛中得了第一名,他的作品被发布在你校的校园网上:
2.同学们对练习书法持不同观点：
（1）一些同学认为书法很重要,有利于发展中国的传统文化；近年来许多传统事物都被人们忽略了,尤其是青少年.
（2）其他同学认为现在随着无纸办公的普及,很少用到书写,所以没有必要练习书法.
要求：只能使用5个句子表达全部内容.
李永龙回答：
MyclassmateWangLi,whoseworks（work改为works,作品是works不是work）waspublishedontheschoolnet,wonthefirstprizeinourschool"scalligraphycompetition.Somestudentsholdtheopinionsthatlearnigcalligraphyisextraordinarily（extrordinary拼写错误,应是extraordinarily,副词才对）important,foritcandevelopourChinesetraditionalcultures.Inrecentyears,manytraditionalthingshavebeenlost（lose改为lost,被动语态）sightof,especiallybyadolescent.Others,whohavetheoppositeideasthatasthepaperlessofficesbecomemoreandmorepopular,wespend（spent改为一般现在时spend,与前面as从句的become时态相一致）littletimeinpaper-（writing分为有纸书写和无纸书写,加上paper-,以与无纸书写区分）writing.So,it'snotneccessarytopratisecalligraphy.
修改后整理的全文如下：
MyclassmateWangLi,whoseworkswaspublishedontheschoolnet,wonthefirstprizeinourschool"scalligraphycompetition.Somestudentsholdtheopinionsthatlearnigcalligraphyisextraordinarilyimportant,foritcandevelopourChinesetraditionalcultures.Inrecentyears,manytraditionalthingshavebeenlostsightof,especiallybyadolescent.Others,whohavetheoppositeideasthatasthepaperlessofficesbecomemoreandmorepopular,wespendlittletimeinpaper-writing.So,it'snotneccessarytopratisecalligraphy
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