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【请为下面雅思作文打分分析原因作文没有写完,因为确实写不下去了作文题目是剑桥雅思真题3第一套题的TASk2NowadaysmanypopularinternationalactivitiesjustliketheworldcupandATPheldontheworld.Underthis】
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请为下面雅思作文打分分析原因作文没有写完,因为确实写不下去了作文题目是剑桥雅思真题3第一套题的TASk2

NowadaysmanypopularinternationalactivitiesjustliketheworldcupandATPheldontheworld.Underthiscircumstances,easinginternationaltensionsandreleasingpatrioticemotionsinasafewayhasbecomeanessentialpartofourworlds.Whilesomepeoplethinksholdtheeventscannoteaseinternationaltensionsandreleasepatrioticemotions.Iprefersupportingonthecontrary.Myargumentsforthispointarelistedasfollows.

Whiletheeventswasholdingintheworld,theworld'speoplewasgatheredtothesameplacetoletmyselfrelaxed.Taketheworldcupforexample.In2010,allovertheworld'speoplefromeverycorneroftheworldtotheSouthAfrica.Theyareholdingtogethertocelebratedthegamesopening.Inthatmoment,therenothadracialdiscrimination,notdifferentculture,notwar.Peoplecanrelaxedtheirheartduringthegames.Theywereabletocametothebar,drankthebeersimultaneouscheerfortheircountry'steam.Itcangotthehappyfromthisevents.

刘莲君回答:
  Inmyhumbleopinion,我觉得大概就5.5吧,虽然用了好多句型和复杂词汇,你不觉得生搬硬套的很变扭么.词用的好多都不太恰当,也很变扭.
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