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Manyanimalsandplantsaredyingouttoday.Whatarethecausesandwhatareyoursolutions?题目是这个...下面就是我的了
Watisundercontroversyisthesideofanimalsandplantsaredyingout.Asviewonthisissuevaryfrompeopletopeople,thereforethereisboundtoalong-lastingdebateonit.
Firstly,from19thto21thcentury,greatdevelopmentoftechnologywereleadingtoairpollutionswhatisthemainreason.Thatistosaywemustbetodominatingtheairpollutions.
Secondly,withthedevelopmentofthepersonslifestyle.Almostallpersonsarerelaxing.Theymaybeforgettingtoprotecingtheenvironmentandtheyareonlytoenjoylife.Thatisthesecondreason.Thisismeantobeimprovingpersonsconsciousness.
Thirdly,manyrichpersonswantstoholdingmorelands,thereforetheymustbetoconstructingmoreandmorebuildings.Manyanimalsandplantsarenotobreathe,whatisthethirdreason.thenpersonsmusttobebindingtoitsrisks.
Tosumup,i'dliketodomanyavailabilitythingsforanimalsandplantsinmypower.Ihopeallpersonscandoingwithme.Ithinkourworldswillbebetter.