第一次写的托福作文花了两个多小时,求检查下一下.给跪了.

求检查一下语法错误.总感觉好多别扭的地方.万分感谢啊.!

问题：whenpeoplemovetoanothercountry,someofthemdecidetofollowthecustomsofthenewcountry.othersprefertokeeptheirowncustoms.comparethesetwo.whichonedoyouprefer?

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Recently,anincreasingnumberofstudentswhoareattendingtouniversityinforeigncountry.Butthereisaproblem,whichwecannotignore,thatisthedifferentcustoms.Itisimportantbecauseifhestillkepthisoldcustomstoanothercountry,hewouldfacealotofdifficulties.Butontheotherhand,remaininghisownhabitsmaylethimfeelcomfortable,forwhichhehasbeenusedtoit.soitraisesaquestion.Whetherpeopleneedtobesubjectedtothecustomsofforeigncountryorjustkeepingtheirownhabit.Inmychoice,Iwillchooseadaptingtothenewcustoms.

Firstly,peopledenyfollowingthenewcustomsthatwillbeadverseforcommunicationwithlocalpeople.Differentculturediffersonperson’sbehavior.Insomecasesthathemaythinkhimself’sbehaviorsjustperfectlynormal,butintheviewofothers,theythinkheisanoddguy,forhiseccentricact.Thenpeoplewouldnotwillingtotalkwithhim.Hemaybelievethatotherpeopleisalsobizarresothathejustimmerseshisownworld.Andtheresultisthatthelackofcommunication.

Second,thefurtherstepofthedevoidofcommunicationisharmfulforhishealthy.Itcaninducephycologicalproblems,suchasdepression,autismandetc.thereisawaytoavoidtheseproblemsthroughthefriends’shelp.Butyouhaveprobablyforgottenthathowhecouldmakefriendswithoutcommunicatingwithoneanother.

Finally,onthecontrarytowhohasrejectednewcustoms.Ifhemadehimselftoacceptnewcustoms,notonlytheproblemswhichhasbeenlistedabovewouldnothappen,butalsohiskenandknowledgeswouldbeenhancedbecausecustomsrootinlocalculture.Hecouldlearnalotaboutculturebystudyingtheircustoms.

Therearestillnumerousadvantagesbyfollowingthecustomsofthenewcountry.Icouldnotabletolistalloftheminawhile.So,inconclusion,IwilldefinitelydragmyselfintothenewcustomswhenImovetoanothercountry.Why